the dark clouds enclosed them selves around me like firese preditors i starded at them in dissmay.my life was about to get worse. in 1 week i was about lose everything and everyone.
why me? what had i done to deserve this?
this how it all started.....
can someone plzzzz coment?
(i know my spelling is really bad!)
It's a really great opening and very mysterious
That is a great opening to your story. Its now a cliffhanger. I want to know want happens next. Its a mystery.
is that all of it?
if yes then its bit short also you need to make it a bot moreobvious what its about because atm its confusing
That is a really great opening to your story. Its now a cliffhanger. I want to know want happens next. Its a mystery.
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